A Tale of Marriage, Medicine and Murder

Were there parts of your original manuscript that you hated to delete from PERSONAL BAGGAGE?


You mean, aside from the hot sex scene I worked so hard to write for Johnny’s birthday night and which, now that I’ve read FIFTY SHADES OF GREY, I realize was totally boring? Yes, there was an experience of mine that I hated to delete from the book, so I shall copy and paste it in right here.

Frozen Man Episode

As soon as she replaced the receiver, the phone rang again.
“This is ER. An ambulance is on the way to your back door with a man the police found outside. He should be there in a minute or two.”
“Why isn’t he coming through ER?” Penny asked.
“Because, Dr. Graham wants him put in CCU. Okay?”
An icy wind swept into the Unit when Penny opened the back door to admit two bundled-up emergency technicians rolling a stretcher loaded with blankets. Earl and Bubba grinned as Penny directed them to a bed across the Unit from Mr. Garrett.
“Who have you brought me?” she asked.
They lifted the blankets to reveal a raggedy man lying on his side with his knees drawn up and his hands on his thighs. His skin was so grimy with dirt that it was hard to tell its color.
Penny touched his arm, which was cold and as hard as tile. He definitely was not breathing. She looked at the gleeful EMTs. “What am I supposed to do?” she asked, tapping the man’s marble-like face.
“Get a gown and we’ll help you take his clothes off,” Earl said. “He passed out drunk leaning up against a building and froze to death. He’s stuck in this position.”
“Yeah, we couldn’t lay him out straight,” Bubba said.
Stopping at the desk, Penny phoned the operator to page the supervisor and then she snatched a gown from the linen closet. The EMT’s had attached electrodes to the man’s chest. She connected them to leads, clicked on the over-bed monitor, and the three of them watched a straight line travel across the screen. Penny switched off the frantic alarm.
“Did Dr. Graham examine him?”
“He looked at him in the ambulance,” Earl said. “Doc said maybe he’d warm up and be okay–-said he’d read somewhere about a man who thawed out and came back alive.”
Penny read his orders, “Watch for signs of life.” The name on the order sheet was John Doe. “We don’t even know who he is!”
The men packed up their equipment and Bubba held out a clipboard. “I need your X on here.”
“What?” Penny looked at the proof-of-delivery form.
“It’s for our records. Put it here. Eever how you sign your name.” Bubba gave Penny a sympathetic pat on the back. “Sorry we couldn’t get the IV going for you. He’s the hardest guy we’ve ever tried to stick.”
Earl snickered, then burst out laughing. “Hard,” he got out before convulsing again. He doubled over with tears running down his cheeks. At last he composed himself and zipped up his orange parka.
Bubba grinned and shook his head. “I’ve got to get him out of here.”

"Margaret McMillion’s novel intricately weaves a woman’s personal doubts and life trials into the intense and stressful operations..."

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